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On Sunday, Jordan used the mad goalie skillz he developed in a week-long intensive goalie school (7 hrs x 5 days) to help his 3 on 3 team win the Gold medal.
The goalie school was great. 7 hours a day x 5 days= heaven for Jordan. On ice (3 hrs/day) there were 2 instructors for 3 students There was dryland training, stretching, video, instruction on mental preparedness. He had a blast. He loves the intensity. And boyhowdy did he ever improve!
Mark watched him on the ice for a few minutes on the last day. He called my cellphone. “You won’t believe what I’m seeing. Its like a different kid.” Yup. Besides just plain ol skill, Jordan has finally developed some serious concentration and focus.
He didn’t have a great lacrosse season this year and had been saying that he wasn’t sure about hockey (yeah, right!). Two weeks before goalie school, he was in hockey school (also 7hrs x 5 days). He attended as a skater, not a goalie. He whined and complained in the days before, saying he didn’t want to go. But that first morning, he was up and ready and when we walked into the arena, he took a deep breath and said, “Ahhh! That’s more like it!” hehhee :) He hasn’t been unsure about hockey since ;)
His final lacrosse tournament ended and then right away he was in goalie school. The week of goalie school, fall rep try-outs started up again. So without a single day off from sports, we are back in the swing of things and our lives revolve around the hockey schedule.
And for the first time, this feels like “normal”. And it’s nice that things are finally getting back to normal. :)
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Dear Dean Koontz,
I was sure I had read at least one of your books before, but when I looked through the list in the front of One Door Away From Heaven, I don’t see anything I recognise. And the sad truth is, if I had read one of your books before, I would definitely not have begun another.
Now, I am no novel writing expert. I’m not even a novel reading expert, but I have a couple of tips to offer.
First, if you are going to write a Sam Spade-esque novel, then do it! Jump in with both feet and write that book! It is a valid and popular genre. It would be great, I’m sure. Or, if you want to fill the pages with palpable atmosphere like John Grisham, then I’m behind you 100%.
However, trying to both at the same time isn’t really working for you. I’m haven’t done a study or anything, but I’m pretty sure that not everyone is a wiseass in their heads; not everyone thinks like that, and certainly not during a struggle for their lives.
My second point is more important though. I think, that perhaps you’ve been mislead by one too many high school creative writing assignments. You see Dean, may I call you Dean? You see, Dean, the metaphor is not actually the point. It is simply a tool. If your grade 11 English teacher is reading this book, I’m sure she is very proud of you. This book is chock full of metaphor! In fact, if we went back and took out the metaphors, you’d lose 80% of the book.
And to be blunt, many of these metaphors are downright cheesy.
Granted, maybe “cheesy” is what you were after, but I doubt it. This is too bad to be cheesy-on-purpose.
I am 165 pages into your book and I know very little. The plot is developing at a snail’s pace, the character development is flat and the foreshadowing and innuendo are getting rather tiresome. Lots of metaphor though. Lots and lots of metaphor.
Of course, I will finish the book. I will see it through and cheer you on to the end. But Dude, this is *work*.
Cross-eyed in Burlington.